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20.6.07

Finally...

...... I post something What do you think of this ?



4 Comments:

At 7:11 AM , Jef Murray said...

Lizi,

I'd like to learn some background before I comment. Particularly, what was this for? I think the "feel" is nice, but I'm expecting you were not striving for a very realistic image, correct? It has a more mythical flair.

I do have some criticism to offer, but don't want to do so unless and until I know the intentions/venue for the piece (since, for example, an illustration that one might criticize as "too sketchy" might be perfect for an article/book that fits that style/mode).

So, could you comment a bit about this image?

 
At 12:21 PM , Lizi said...

This is just a drawing I have been working on and playing with for a while. It isn't for a book or anything just something I made up.
I think the curtain on the left is a bit sketchy but, I was worried about graying up the picture you know? I don't want it to be too dark. I really like how the hair turned out also the hand and face...I was aiming for her to look somewhat realistic but, not entirely because I usually like to do large eyes. What would make her look more realistic?
Thanks.

 
At 7:52 AM , Jef Murray said...

Lizi,

For greater realism, I'd mostly look to proportions. Even given that the eyes are unusually large, the nose seems a bit too long and chin too small. Take a look at an actual photograph of a woman's face side-by-side with your sketch and see if what I'm saying makes sense.

I'd also suggest...again, for realism, as this wouldn't apply if you wish to retain a stylized look...that you look at how light on hair actually falls...in your sketch, the locks are a bit too patterned...likewise with curtain behind. Light on actual hair tends to not reflect uniformly, but tapers off from highlight points. I'd also spend a bit more time on the hand; it looks a little small compared to the face, and the little finger in particular doesn't seem quite right compared to the others.

Now, all that said, there's a marvellous otherworldliness that you've captured, and almost all of the above could and should be dismissed if you're not trying for a very realistic image. In particular, there's almost an icon-like feel to what you've drawn, and perhaps that style is one you'd like to explore more...?

Hope some of this helps....

 
At 12:05 PM , Lizi said...

Ok. Thank you ! It helps to have another's view and comments.

 

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